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Okay, so I’ve been reading a lot of fanfiction and now I know that a lot of you need a lesson in the art of creating OC’s. I’ll admit I’ve created some crappy OC’s in the past, but I was like ten and they got a decent number of followers, so I something right.

I’m guessing all of you have read at least one fanfiction where an OC ends up with the main character and trumps an important romance between him/her and another character. We’ll that OC may me a candidate for a Mary sue/Gary stu label.

What are Mary sue’s and Gary stu’s you may ask, we’ll I’m here to educate you in these two GIANT crimes against decent fanfiction. Trust me, an OC can make or break a fanfiction.

Here are the traits of a Mary sue.
-Everything in the story goes perfect for her. (This includes romance, school, Pokemon battling, duel monsters, fights, ect.)
-She has absolutely NO personality flaws what so ever. (She is nice no everyone, even people who hate her, which makes them fall in love with her and things like that.) Note: if you see that your character is turning into a Mary sue, do not, under any circumstances make her Bi-polar, it will make you seem lazy and like you don’t even care about your fanfiction.
-She has no weakness.
-Every male character (possibly even obviously gay ones) are attracted to her and will do anything to get with her (even kill each other, which will make her step in and magically stop it all and they’ll all go back to being friends.
-She has some long-lost relationship with one of the main characters, usually involving love. (She was friends with Ash before they both got Pokemon and wants to battle him to see his skills is okay, but she dated Gary and wants to rekindle what the once had is not)
-She has an extremely tragic story that somehow links her to the main character. (Example: There are actually ten tailed beasts and she is the carrier of the tenth)
-She dies an unatraly tragic death. (Cancer or anything like that doesn’t ruin the plot as much, but a made up disease might)
-She is immortal and is only partly human. (Most commonly vampire or at least part vampire. Not sure what crazy girls have with vampires, but I blame Twilight)
-Everyone (or almost everyone) is in love with her or is her friend. (It is very common for on character to hate her, but fall for her in the end)
-Has an over-used name like Sakura or Ayame.
-Makes a character become out of character AKA OOC. (Example: an openly gay character becomes straight and falls in love with her)
-Anything like what is listed above.
A Gary stu is just a male version of a Mary sue.

Now let’s get to making go OC’s! Here’s a list of everything you’ll need to decide on.

Name/nickname. This may sound simple, but there are many things you must factor in. The name should fit your character, but not absolutely perfectly. Also, if it takes place in another country, find a name from there for him/her. It really gets on my nerves when I  see something like Abby Uchiha.

Age. Make sure  it corresponds properly with your story, also don’t use your own age.

Hair: Use a natural hair color unless your character has a reason for it (Mutant, clan trait, ect.) Their hair style should fit with their personality and their hair should not be longer than it should be for their age.

Eye color: like hair color, your characters eye color should be natural unless they have a good reason. Also, humans CANNOT have cat eye’s.

Outfit: try to keep it modest unless your characters personality says otherwise. Don’t make it all black unless there’s a good reason.

Place of residence: get your facts straight. Look up the place you want them to live in and know it by heart.

Personality: pretty simple, personalities are not to be matched with names.

Powers: keep it modest, don’t give them anything special unless there’s a reason.

Weakness: if they have none, then they are a Mary sue.

Era: what time period are they from.

If you need, I will be willing to take a look at your OC’s.

Useful sites:

Real names:
Fantasy names:

Creators (for visualizing OC’s):
Harry Potter:…
School girls:…
Animal girls: the-clockwork-crow.deviantart.…

I will go through and make a good example OC and a bad one with all the creators.

I own nothing, all creators and sites belong to their respective owners.
Instuctions on how to create good OC's. I will be writing more articles about how to write good fanfiction. I am open to suggestions.
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KawaiiDesuNya222 Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  New member Professional Artisan Crafter
DragonDescendant Featured By Owner May 24, 2014
Very helpful.  Luckily, my character doesn't truly have any of those Mary Sue characteristics.  She does have a tragic past, but it does not connect her with any other character.
Animedemon001 Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Good. And remember, no one trait will ever make your character a Sue (Unless she's like a wolf demon in Hetalia or something).
DragonDescendant Featured By Owner May 24, 2014
Well, her name is Amara Phoenix, and she's a severely bullied high school freshman.  She does interact with the Hetalia characters: however, she does not represent a country.
Animedemon001 Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
See, you're entering risky territory there. If its the regular series, then it's probably a bad idea, but if its an AU of some sort (Like a highschool AU), that should be fine.
DragonDescendant Featured By Owner May 24, 2014
I see.  But Amara's past does not connect her to the main character.  It's just why she's so scared.
Animedemon001 Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really don't know, if you showed me the fic or whatever, I might be able to give you some tips. If she's well developed this shouldn't matter And you do not need to care what another artist thinks. If you don't think she's a Sue, then you should just continue with her. 
DragonDescendant Featured By Owner May 25, 2014
All right. I haven't posted the fic yet (I've already written two chapters) because I've been so busy (and I need to draw a cover), but I'll post it when I can.
SnowblindOtter Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Creating a character, based on an existing 'universe', such as an anime, cartoon, or video game(i.e. Sonic the Hedgehog, Pokemon, Bleach, Soul Eater, Naruto, Hetalia, Dethnote, Fullmetal Alchemist being among the most horrendously abused examples), is a Fan-character, or F.C. not an Original Character. Here's the difference:

Sochi Komura is a thirteen-year old girl of Japanese descent, attending the DWMA. She has been studying with the academy for the last five years, gradually becoming increasingly proficient in combat with her weapon partner, Tosin, who's weapon-morph is a double-edged tsurugi saber. While not studying at the academy, she lives with her parents, and two siblings, in an up-scale apartment in Death City, however she rarely ventures further than the two locations. Sochi is xenophobic, and her anxiety of unfamiliar people drives her to be strongly withdrawn, and introverted. While she is a student with above-average, but by no means 'Straight-A' grades, Sochi has almost no friends, outside of her partner Tosin, and Shinigami himself expresses a slight concern that her introversion could possibly hamper her ability to fight effectively in cornered situations.

In this example, Sochi, while well-balanced and decently fleshed out, ready to get a more in-depth personality, is not an Original Character. No matter how much time and effort you can put into a character like Sochi, or even if you fleshed out Tosin, they will never be an 'original'. They are simply a character base, dropped into a pre-created universe for simplicity's sake in not having to come up with anything more than their personality. The only thing original about them may be their name, and perhaps the personality that was just ripped off from Crona. This, is just simply lazy. They are just a Fan-Character, and that is all they ever will be, unless you plucked them out of the Soul-Eater universe, and came up with some creativity.

Jake is an eighteen year old boy living in the suburbs of Gamma Capital, the star-city on the newly colonized planet-moon Gamma Epsilon-Bb(Astronomical code GE-Bb_119G4STAR). He lives virtually alone, most of the eight-day week the moon has, in a rented house just up-spin of the main artery in and out of the capital city, and only avenue to take if one wanted to reach the space elevator at the center of the hub. He works part-time, for just above minimum wage, at a restaurant just a short bus-ride away from his home. Jake has no family, that he is aware of, being in and out of various orphanages since as far back as his living memory stretches, but goes through his various day-to-day activities happily, believing that if his original family had wanted him, then he wouldn't have been in orphanages, and that he is probably better off not knowing a family where he was unwanted. His main focus, in life, is to manage to use the job he has now to get into a university, and become a pilot for space-travel, and explore the cosmos.

Jake, from the ground up, is 100% original. Everything from his relatively optimistic personality, to his upbeat, though slightly jaded, view on family life and goals, was created from scratch, taking no direct influence from any anime, video game, cartoon, or(as far as I'm aware of) science-fiction novels by known authors. Stuck in a setting that is well away from Earth on a fictitious life-supporting moon in another solar system, he escapes the bustle and familiarity of what we know and are familiar with, and creates an interesting character that people can relate to, not have to worry about misunderstanding fandoms or franchises.
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